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This was a great chapter! There is so much detail, but the descriptions introduce the character so well and his way of thinking. It's a mixture between humor and romance and relationship and courting. I can't wait to read on!
SEI was hooked instantly, I am really excited for the next chapter, hoping for something spicy to happen!
Haha! I like the cliffhanger at the end. It's still pretty harmless, but you write so well and obviously master the language. I wonder what'll happen to convince the main character to give Jun a chance. I like the length of the paragraphs and chapter. Great grammar and spelling
SESo close! I thought something might happen, but with the pre heat and all, I can see why not. I don't really like the fact that people are trying to kill him though? Wouldn't that just send Jun in a killing frenzy? Killing the one he loved?
Getting steamier here...Jun is kinda a klutz and sexy - it's an interesting mixture, while the main character is trying his best to resist, knowing he shouldn't, but at the same time knowing he can't resist. You've created really likeable characters here
This chapter was really great! The ending was the best, though - the way he stood up to his cheating ex and gave it to him straight what an a*hole he is. But what an interesting moment to realize that Jun is actually more attractive to him than he was prepared to admit...
This was the cutest, fluffiest chapter by far!! Okay, so as of now, I actually do think that Jun could actually be a serious partner. Well written chapter - I like how you jump back and forth between the current story and previous dates or events
Wow...that final sentence was great! And this cozy date that started out really childlike turned rather intense and erotic, with the promise for more. Great work!
Another great cliffhanger. And thankfully this annoying woman is being put limits to - she's completely and utterly loathesome
This chapter was pretty hot. And spicy if they're doing these things in public. Well written. The only thing that would have made this even more awesome would have been if the main character's ex had appeared and seen how sexed up the main character was with Jun!
Okay, this is becoming pornographic *wink* I think it's a fine line between coming off hot, sensual and steam and writing complete smut or junk. I think you've managed to maintain that fine line really well. It's fun and easy to read what you've written and the story is pretty good so far.
I'm not a fan of this slut-business, but you write it in such a way that it's bearable to read. It' also quite interesting to see how Jun seems to mature with each chapter, growing more and more into how I'd have imagined an Alpha to be - calm, cool...and a bit dorky, but way more in control
Oh, the ending was so sweet! How Jun is so caring and even offers to bring along a chaperone. But then the "cold bucket of water" that Damon splashes himself with, holding back and feeling guilty. It's a great mix and increases the suspense - great move
Your cliffhangers are all so point on! Well, this chapter took on a different turn. The start with the unsettling email - I really hate Damon's ex and his parents are such pushovers, Damon's internal thoughts and then Mark at the end with troubling news. This just keeps getting better with drama!!
Okay, this secret was unexpected. I was expecting something like Mark telling him that Jun had had x girlfriends and boyfriends and that he was currently in a relationship or something, but this move further complicates things. Great idea!
This part was less erotic and more psychological. It shows the depth of friendship between Damon and Mark and Mark's worry about his friend getting hurt. I like how the rumor was set up and how, although Damon is quick to rationalize that rumors can't be trusted, part of him does fear it could hold
This was highly interesting. I've never read about a werewolf transforming and it never crossed my mind that it would be painful. This was a really cute chapter where the werewolf side was illuminated and the pair getting to know each other in this form. Another good cliffhanger
This was a pretty intense chapter. Once again, Mark is shown as a very dedicated and caring friend to put himself in the line of danger. Interesting as well was the background exposition on alphas and their hurting themselves and others. And yet another cliffhanger that could go either way
What a predicament. This chapter is dangerously close too descrbing a rape and even though Mark leaves to get help, this situation remains very difficult. It's described that Jun seems to try to fight against his instincts, but Damon is in a very awkward and helpless situation. Hard to read
Oh, this chapter was fantastic. This shows the ability of the author to really create an emotional response within the reader. I feel bad or Jun, but most of all I can absolutely understand Damon's turmoil and his worries. And the implications that were so neatly interwoven - a fantastic job!
Good build-up to the next chapter. This one sees Jun and Damon separated, but with Jun demanding to see Damon. Latter is becoming more aware of his deeper feelings for Jun. The idea of finally sitting down to talk things through with Jun is long overdue and I wonder how it'll go
this was a bit disappointing. This chapter promised so much and yet the main topic discussions were all avoided and nothing has been cleared.
This is much better! DAmon getting updates on Jun and missing him, but remaining firm about keeping his distance. His lack of enthusiasm about heading to the gala and the irresponsibly egotistical reply from Damon's mother. And now the ex making trouble again - cliffhanger!
This chapter was excellent. And though I fear that Malachi will prrobably come up with some terrible revenge plan, I'm gladthat Damon finally had enough ass in his pants to tell Malachi's parents that he wasn't interested and that he felt harassed. Finally!!
Sweet! And now it's hopefully about to get hot again. This couple is so adorable, it's really hard not to ship them. I especially like the jealous-destroyed way that Jun is described when he smells Damon's ex all over him
This was a hot chapter! And thank you for not having made it complete fluff or pornographic. It was actually very well written and thankfully didn't feel like a rape- these two seem to finally be getting closer and could start something that could be a relationship
Very sweet and touching scene, quite intimate. Lying together and reading Damon's thoughts was relaxing and amusing at the same time. this cliffhanger was mean! Bringing up the parents and then the mention of the gala. I'm kinda dreading reading on to hear what the conniving ex has come up with...
Oh no, the drama :(( And as I thought, the ex is way worse and his parents aren't as innocently dumb as they were pretending to be. This is just horrible to read :((( I really hope that Damon can find a way to get back at Malachi and his lying, stupid ass! And now finally - the talk!
Okay, I would have preferred more details here and would have expected Jun to react wilder and angrier, but this cliffhanger at the end and news of Jun having been with someone older is rather intresting. I'm also guessing that Malachi's parents and Damon's parents won't accept his explanation...
This was so cute, how they climbed into bed together, looking at each other and falling asleep peacefully...over to suddenly and violently getting woken up and now at the mercy of a craving alpha. The pace in this story never slows down, it remains interesting and the characters are fun.
That escalated quickly...again, interesting how an almost rape could be turned around by using the Other Damon. The trigger warning at the top of the chapter was a very good idea, as some people could be offended by the casual rape-y atmosphere here. I hope Damon reaches the condoms in time...
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