The pouring rain, the dark sky... they all begged me to go to sleep. Usually, I would fall asleep under conditions like these. But, for some reason, I felt more active than ever, jumpy, even.
Drip, drip, drip,went the small leak on the roof. The girls around me continued to snore. This boarding school had been what my parents thought was best for me, and so far I'd agreed. But now... I'd never felt so uneasy, living here.
Drip, drip, drip,the leak wouldn't stop. My eyes were fully adjusted to the dark. My pale skin stood out in the shadows. I could vaguely make out the shapes of the other girls sleeping. I tossed and turned, careful not to make any noise and wake anybody up.
I pressed my thumb against the small engraved locket I wore, as if trying to leave my name, Pixie, imprinted on my finger. I felt as if I were being watched...
My brown eyes started to shut as I fell asleep. Whatever dreams I had that night were nothing but peaceful, that was for sure. However, by morning, all my memories of them had been erased.
Merci pour la lecture!
It's so interesting and intriguing! I could read this for years without getting bored. Your writing style is so beautiful and mature. I love it so much !
NGI honestly say this is great so far, many possibilities could happen in this book. I mean I am only one chapter in so I can’t really say how much I really like it. But I do love the detail you are putting into this. You are a great writer and I can’t wait to finish reading this and reading more of your books in the future!
This is a very interesting start. There's a sense of danger which isn't explicitly stated - I think this was very well described. One wants to carry on reading because it sparks interest
The story has good potential. The POV helps to know through whose eyes you're looking through, but there's a lot of description. It's a pity there was a cut and then the murder was discovered. I like the way the chapter is mostly written, but I wish the ending had been as detailed as the beginning
This chapter is a little weaker than the one before, mainly because Silas is quite different from Pixie. At the same time, it's obvious that he's distraught about having found his best friend murdered. Still, here it could have helped to have known how he died, where it occurred, how the others feel
I wish there were more details here! Why are Silas and the other boy feuding? How long has it been going on? Why don't the kids tell anyone that their friend has been murdered!? What are their motives? the story line is great, but not even the teacher seems to care about the bullying. What a pity!
JI love how different Silas and Pixie are. You did a great job writing them! :)
Action! And finally Pixie is back - I prefer her POV. She's responsible, finally told an adult about having found the body and she explains her actions more. And then, near the end of the chapter, a cliffhanger! This was a fun chapter
Bam! The story is picking up pace and there's another bomb dropped at the end of the chapter. Pixie wakes up, but seems to be hurt. She realizes that something is wrong and that no one wants to tell her what's wrong. The feeling of suspense is returning and it's enjoyable to read :D
JFirst things first: I hate Bela. Also, you may want to proofread this chapter.
This sure is some character development! Hannah the sneak talks to Silas and wants to know if he has a suspect for the school murders. And she seems to suspect Pixie of all people. This time Silas is a bit clearer in his head and feels lonely, making him relatable. Surprising turn here - well done!
Are We Friends Now? (Silas' POV)JBasil finally tried to make amends with Silas!... But then he had to go ahead and ruin it. Haha, I love these kids.
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