sean-elliot Sean Elliot

Started awhile back as a metaphorical writing for me, think it sounds like a good first chapter for a book. Anyone have comments, ideas of where to go with it?


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The End

I lost the fight. I lost the battle. I lost the war. And now, I lay on this blood soaked field, the very life seeping from my veins. I look back upon my past. The victories, the defeats. The friends and companions gained and lost along the way. I look back and remember what exactly it was that i fight for. I fought for you. Every step of the way. Every blow I dealt, every wound I received, all of it for you. Now I see my enemy approaching, stalking toward my body, fire burning in his eyes. I clutch your token in my hand, a small thing, but it holds all of my memories of you. Staring into the face of my doom, I retreat into those memories, reliving the past with joy, yet held in the present by pain. He knelt down by my head, pulling a dagger as he did so. Pulling of my helm he held the dagger to my neck, the cold sharpness of the blade biting into my skin. "Get it over with", I spat, between clenched teeth.

"Oh, we aren't done with you yet, you still have purpose." With that he raised his gauntlet covered fist, striking my skull. As my eyes faded and I sunk into blessed darkness, I heard him shout over the battlefield, "Load him up and head back, we have what we need."

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Sean Elliot I write mostly because and about my Starlight, a person very close to me and something more. The twin of my own soul. I write mostly poetry, but also some short stories.

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SL Star Light
I’m ready for this chapter ohhh I’m excited already
December 15, 2021, 20:17

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    About a third written. Posted what i have so far December 15, 2021, 20:26
SL Star Light
Like fighting brutal or like dark brutal? Either way I’m down😊😊
December 15, 2021, 20:05

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Torture. A bit of sadist healer. December 15, 2021, 20:11
SL Star Light
Oooo bad guy name 😊
December 15, 2021, 20:00
SL Star Light
Sebastian, Finn, Kai, I could go on lol
December 15, 2021, 17:58

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Kai... I like that one December 15, 2021, 18:10
  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    I think chapter 2 is going to be a bit brutal December 15, 2021, 18:14
  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Ive always liked the name mordecai for some reason December 15, 2021, 18:35
SL Star Light
Hmmmm are you asking suggestions cuz I totally have some.
December 15, 2021, 17:54
SL Star Light
I’m sure it will be amazeballz
December 15, 2021, 17:50
SL Star Light
Oooo I will have to think on it.
December 15, 2021, 17:40

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Had to move it, since was in the 1 chapter section lol. Thinking on the next chapter. December 15, 2021, 17:48
  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Worst part of writing, naming characters, esp mains. The name becomes them, their energy, persona, responses. And trying to create names that are not only original, but befits the world and landscape that is their home... December 15, 2021, 17:53
SL Star Light
I’m going to definitely need more of this one.
December 15, 2021, 17:33

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Alright, ill keep working on it. Any ideas? Havent really taken any direction in my head yet, just thought it sounded good and wrote out well. December 15, 2021, 17:37
SL Star Light
Soooo good already
December 15, 2021, 17:11

  • Sean Elliot Sean Elliot
    Thanks. Like I really need to start another story lol. Ill finish one eventually December 15, 2021, 17:32
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